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英国留学:个人陈述6类开头着重点评

发布时间:2011-12-10 15:01 来源:字号:T|T

  陪伴着留学申请的竞争越来越剧烈,小我私人告诉在申请中的浸染也愈加重要,尤其对付英国留学申请,小我私人告诉乃至会成为申请乐成与否的要害,因此英国留学网()为留学申请人,尤其是DIY申请人提示几点小我私人告诉写作的留意事项,留意停止以下6种小我私人告诉的写作开头:

  一、一再简历

  I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university, which provided me with a profound background in atmospheric science. During this period, I received Outstanding Student Scholarship for my excellent performance in the academic field. I found that …is abstruse and interested, and there are so many things I did not understand. Thus I decided to learn more.

  点评:小我私人告诉不要去一再简历中的对象,这在许多学校的PS要求中明晰提到,小我私人告诉的写作要详细到变乱上,变乱办理上,而不要纯真一再已有的内容。

  二、学校先容型

  I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China. (…… University is a prestigious university of general education with 20 departments and a regular annual enrollment of 8,000 students ) I studied at ……(E. E) Department, ahighly selective department with a gathering of smart students who are hard to compete with.

  点评:该同窗的开头便是是一个申请学校的简介,这仿佛是在辅佐学校做宣传,或表达你有多相识该学校,而不是写小我私人告诉了。这是没故意义的开头,白白挥霍了字数,最轻易被秒据掉。

  三、剽窃句式型

  As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since Ientered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.

  点评:Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从那边学到的,许多同窗在用。但你要知道,老外最恨剽窃,最喜原创,以是好坏相关各人想想吧。

  四、救世主型

  I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, … He must ever be receptive and sensitive to the new; and have sufficient courage and skill to novel facts and to deal with them." And I have been longing to be the man to face and solve novel problems.

  点评:一副救世主的形象,小时辰就受富兰克林的影响,勤苦改变天下。小我私人告诉的写作必然要小我私人化详细化,别吹大牛,乃至带着一种霸权主义思想。

  五、犹抱琵琶型

  Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

  点评:重点放在本身要做重大抉择上了,人生的转折点,然其后上句所谓名言警句。挥霍字数,有限的字数里,同窗们应该学会直接,而且抓住重点,突出本身最有上风的方面,最有特色的方面。

  六、言稚子型

  'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle. So most of the things in my family has been takenapart by me, from my father's shaver to my mom' motorcycle. I can even fix somesimple households, listened to other people's praise, to learn science well became my dream and felt the science will accompany with me in my whole life.

  点评:上来就回想童幼年年本身怎样有着宏大幻想,who cares。小我私人告诉字数有限,却用这么多话描写童年,没有任何意义。学校想知道你怎样对待将来,而不是怎样渡过已往。

  综上所述,以上六种开头各人必然要极力停止,出国留学申请人越来越多,申请竞争越来越剧烈,各人全心筹备的小我私人告诉但愿成为各人被登科的亮点,而不是成为各人申请乐成的绊脚石。

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